This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note… some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
In Whakarua we have been learning to use describing words in our writing.
We wrote a Summer Poem about what we remember about summer.
We used adjectives to make our Poem more interesting.
Here is my Summer Poem I hope you like It.
Hi Zane its Ian. I loved how you used your adjectives in your writing. Maybe next time you could add why you posted this. Did you enjoy writing this poem ?
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say. Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about.
ReplyDeleteHi Zane its Ian.
I loved how you used your adjectives in your writing.
Maybe next time you could add why you posted this.
Did you enjoy writing this poem ?
Kind regards Ian.
Hi Zane. I like your good writing. Your story makes me thinks of rainbows . You did a great job .
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